This is my first narrative from class. My favorite part is the part where she finds out that her mother is Maleficent, or Mallory, in this case. I based this piece off of Sleeping Beauty and Cinderella. I have to admit, that the story isn't as detailed as I would want it to be, but I felt that I should get used to writing shorter stories. I call my narrative Cinder Beauty, since I didn't have much time to think of the title. I think that I could have done better.
Quarter TwoFor this Quarter, I decided to include one of my journal entries about Ancient China, The Great Wall, to be exact. I decided to include this piece because it shows how I could make my writing better. I think that I could have included more citations, and that it could've been more spaced out and divided into paragraphs.
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The Great Wall of China has both a positive and negative effect on China. The Great Wall of China’s main purpose was to protect Northern China from invasion. And the wall did, it protected China for a long time, and is still up today. The wall provided guards with shelter, and it protected China from the Mongols, and other countries. Although, the Mongols did invade China twice. Great Wall Of China- Kids Discover says, “...built to protect the Chinese from waves of invaders.” The Great Wall of China didn’t only serve Ancient China, it is also a well known wonder of the world. The Great Wall is viewed by tourists and is very popular. The wall is historical and has cultural value to the Chinese. The Great Wall isn’t made of man-made materials, it is made of all natural substances such as bricks and twigs. The Great Wall of China may have made negative impacts on China, though. Even though these effects aren’t the wall’s fault, they still affect the world. The Great Wall of China is known as the World’s longest cemetery. The name itself is very negative. The people who worked on the Great Wall were buried both inside the wall and next to it. “...With the help of the Great Wall, the Han Dynasty conquered more” says Who When and Why built the Great Wall of China?. Even though this is good for China, it is worse for the conquered countries. Not only was the wall bad for other countries, it was work for the people who built it. The people who built the wall were slaves and prisoners. Most people who worked on the wall were working involuntarily. They often died of starvation, exhaustion, and accidents. For this quarter (Quarter 3) I decided to put in my GMO debate prep document. I put this document in my portfolio because I am really proud of it. I think that I did a good job of stating my side in the debate.
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I decided to put in my Renaissance Biography because I am very proud of it. I am proud of it because I really went above and beyond with this piece, by going over double the amount of words necessary. I think that I could have easily put in more facts about Queen Elizabeth, because she is so interesting. I enjoyed writing the biography because I love writing! I feel like I deserved the A+ that I got on this piece!
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